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#1 Crimson Lego

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Posted 22 December 2008 - 10:56 AM

Name: Leo Crimson
Race: Steel Dwarf
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Height: 4'11
Weight: 110
Occupation: Craftsmen, assassin
Weapons: survival knife, axe that can be thrown like a boomerang, bow and arrows
Talents: able to move silently despite his weight
Clothing: baggy pants, leather boots and gloves, green cloak, black sweater, leather belt
Strengths: If mad enough, he can go partially-berserk in a battle and kill loads of people; also an expert marksmen and stealth fighter
Weaknesses: When "berserk", if he is wounded badly or too much, he will return to normal state and very dizzy. This happens in large battles and fights. Sometimes, when he is concentrating on 1 target, he will not notice another sneaking up behind him.

Biography: Leo has been an inhabitant of Kvot for most of his life. As a child, he helped his father build some weapons and tools. The young Crimson never met his mother. Soon, they had become 1 of the most famous businessmen in Zok. Unfortunately, his father died when Leo was 18. Since then, he has been working on his own. His father, Leroy, left him a survival knife as an inheritance item on his deathbed. Leo always keeps it with him in a sheath on his belt. He also found his father's lucky quiver under his bed and always wears it. Now a lonely person, he can spend hours in his workshop building tools and weapons for travelers. Leo Crimson has made a number of friends who occasionally stop buy for a drink. Apart from hunting deer, he has not had the chance to exercise his combat skills in a long, long time. But that may change soon.

Edited by leo604, 23 December 2008 - 11:32 AM.


#2 Steel Samurai

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Posted 22 December 2008 - 09:44 PM

You need to expand a wee bit more on the bio and add strengths and weaknesses before I can tell you anything more. Good start though.

#3 Crimson Lego

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Posted 22 December 2008 - 09:55 PM

Ok I changed it. Hope it's better now. :lol:

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Posted 22 December 2008 - 10:40 PM

Ok, you need to explain "killng when he can" Also, why is he lonely when he has friends who drop by for a drink, seemingly so often?

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Posted 23 December 2008 - 08:27 AM

1. Well, the "killing when he can" was a bit odd, so I took that out.
2. Those friends only stop by occasionally, but what I meant by "lonely" is that he doesn't have anyone to share a life with him. In a way, it means he doesn't have a family(which is true).

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Posted 23 December 2008 - 11:15 AM

Ok, fair enough. I think you need one more weakness to balance things out and you should be good.

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Posted 23 December 2008 - 11:32 AM

Done. Hope it's good. :lol:

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Posted 23 December 2008 - 03:51 PM

Ok, I'm going to approve this with the understanding that you won't overdo/god with the stealth skills etc.




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