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[Renegade]

Character: Alabast Druin

Original: Yes

Origin: My Imagination, For Dragon Lords

Race/Nationality: Human

Age: 18

Height: 6'

Weight: 190 lbs.

Build: average

Hair: Dark Brown, and Long, usually in a mess looking as if he just woke up

Eyes: Brown

Attire: Black, loose fitting, baggy pants, with a open green vest, overtop of which he wears a red cloak with the broach holding it on on his right shoulder, the cloak comes down to his ankles and is torn and ragged at the bottom, the collar of the cloak comes up to cover his face from the tip of his nose down(not in a tight way). Has a necklace with his family crest on it.

Face: generally clean shaven

Armament: a Katana forged to amplify the effects of nature magic attached to his left hip.

Strengths: quick thinker, usually relying on brains rather than force to take out an enemy.
Can utililize the power of wind through Nature magic.
Skilled in combat using the katana to channel wind through.


Weaknesses: Not strong physically, so very weak with hand to hand combat.
the only type of Nature magic he can preform is through the use of wind.
If the amplifying sword isnt present with him then he usually wont use nature magic for fear of killing himself.

Bio: Alabast was born in the city of Sinden in the Golar region.
As a child, Alabast was attracted to the outdoors. He would leave the city for the entire day just to be out and about in the wilderness, because of this fact the other children tended to pick on him, and he started to feel left out, like he didnt belong in a city with other people. So, when he turned 16, he mentioned this to his mother and father.
That was the day his family decided to move.
Now Alabast's father Garen, was an adept master of Nature magic, of the wind sort, and had a Katana specially forged to amplify the effects of his Nature Magic. Alabasts mother, April, was a fair woman. She had no particular talent in magic, or anything of that nature, but she was a good mother to Alabast.
His parents had decided on living on a plain on the other side of the mountains, by the woods.
As they were passing by the mountains Alabast thought he heard something moving, like footsteps following them, so he turned and looked..nothing but the side of the mountain. So he shrugged it off as his own wild imagination.
Well he and his family had reached a narrow pass in the mountain through wich they had to go. So they went with April just behind Alabast and Garen. Then they heard April scream and had enough time to turn around to see her get nocked against the side of the mountain and killed by a Granite Ogre. Garen, prepared to protect his son, turned and said "Alabast get out of here!" and turned to face the ogre.
The ogre raised his club and swung down and Garen only blocked it by using both hands to block with his Katana and channeling Nature magic through it.
Needless to say though the katana was wrenched from his hands and went flying.
Then Garen made the mistake of trying to retrieve it when he was smashed by the club.
The ogre then turned his attention to Alabast, who was standing there mortified. The ogre reached out and picked him up, then with the other hand the ogre swung at Alabast.
Alabast saw the club coming and screamed "NOOOOOOOOO!" and as he did he felt this weird pulse inside of himself and as he looked again the club was stopped a foot from his face. He looked down and noticed that the ogre's hand was straining to keep ahold of him, yet the hand was no longer closed around him but a foot from his body. Alabast noticed something else too, where the club was trying to hit him and the hand trying to grip him he could see something..was that wind?
then he noticed it disappear and he fell and hit the ground.
Alabast thought, 'If that was wind i was harnessing earlier maby i can do it again', so he tried to remember the thought and feelings he had earlier and focused on his hand. He looked in his hand and there was a ball of wind, and also that pulse,so he shot it at the ogre.
When he shot it, some of the wind recoiled and sliced his arm open..'so i cant keep myself from being injured when i do this' thought Alabast. He looked up and saw that the wind bolt, had put a deep gash in the orges chest.
Alabast then looked directly next to him and there was...'My fathers sword!' so he reached over and picked it up and thought 'maybe i wont injure myself if i try to channel it trough here.'
So, Alabast then focused that pulse he felt when he harnessed the wind and focused on the sword. He looked at the sword and could see the wind whirling around the blade, Alabast the slashed the air in the direction of the ogre and it shot a blade of wind at the ogre.
The ogre raised an arm to defend himself and the wind blad cut through the arm and also the neck...
Now the ogre was dead..but so were his parents.
Alabast buried his parents bodies and mouned for a few days. Then with the thought that his parents would want him to move on with his life, he left.
He wandered for two years afterward, honing his skills in using the katana and wind along the way, just trying to stay alive...to survive..

[Renegade]

i hate to double post like this, but i would like some help.
please if there is anything, or everything wrong with my charicter please tell me so i can either revise him or just plain scrap him and start from scratch.
please.

[Steel Samurai]

Eh, fine I suppose.