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#1 SL the Pyro

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Posted 25 July 2008 - 12:18 PM

(Figured I'd try something different this time.)

Name: Irukanji Ibuki
Race: Vampir (Purple)
Original: Yes

Age: 28
Gender: Male
Skin: Pale White
Height: 7'0''
Hair: Dark Purple (stops just above the his nostrils, shielding his eyes for the most part)
Preferred Clothing: a pitch-black cloak that makes him appear as a black silhouette except for his glowing eyes, but wears common clothing whenever possible in the presence of average humans
Eyes: Silver with no pupils

Affiliation: loosely to the Empire, but mostly to himself

Weaponry: throwing knives, high-calibur pistol with a silencer, claws and teeth (from Body Alteration) and magic

Strengths:
-extremely powerful magic capabilities
-more resistant to the sun than most Vampiri
-great athletic ability

Weaknesses:
-ability to fight is considerably weakened in sunny places
-poor physical resistance to attacks
-can hover and fly, but it gives out randomly

Biography: Irukanji is a Purple Vampir that used to live at a secret hideaway at the Twin Claws of Hinjeid, along with many other Purple Vampiri. There they practiced magic and how to mingle with humans tirelessly, knowing that one day they would be found by humans who shunned their existance and hunted. At the tender age of 9, that day came; despite the Vampiri efforts, all but Irukanji himself was slain. He had managed to escape to a settlement in South Hamner, away from the horrid scene of bloodshed and death that was once his home. Reflecting to his training, he took on the role of an abandonded, lost child. He was taken in by a couple of kind and loving human parents, Amila and Rowan; while he knew they weren't his true parents, they cared for him as much as his real ones did. They didn't even care that he was a Vampir.

For another three years Irukanji lived with his adoptive parents, still practicing his magic when he could get some privacy and sneaking blood from unsuspecting/sleeping residents of the town whenever possible. Eventually, though, he was seen during feeding time by a curious child who warned the same wretched group that slaughtered his real family. No more than two hours passed when the vile men pounded on the door of his home. His "parents" didn't even get the chance to say they had no idea what they meant when they said a Vampir was living with them; they were killed right on the spot in a horrible show of blood and gore. Something in Irukanji's head snapped that day, and for the first time his magic power came out for offensive purposes. It came out in the form as a terrible firestorm, the flames reflecting his intense hatred for the men. Within minutes, the men were a mixture of blood, bones and ashes on the floor of his house.

Now without parents, Irukanji was forced to fend for himself in the town. It continued this way until he was 19 years of age, at which point he began to explore the world and better his magical abilities. Between then and the present day, he learned about the history of the world and how a large majority of the people fought only for themselves, so he went with the flow and became a vigilante. He takes jobs from various employers and factions -- usually the Empire -- seeking to fight for the greater good sometimes, but mostly looking out for himself. The result: he is very rich -- the place where he hides these riches is unknown -- and, during these ventures, has gained a massive arsenal of magical powers. He also became adept with a high-calibur handgun, throwing knives and -- if need be -- phyisical combat with the assistance of Body Alteration.

Personality: Irukanji is clever, devious and manipulative, doing whatever he can to have his cake and eat it too. He is also calm and collected at all times, and only returns insults rather than make them. He has a preferance to get things done quickly and quietly, making him a probable canidate for any jobs that require stealth. He has a soft spot for abused and tormented people, however, probably due to his hard life as a child; he will help this people out however possible, but he otherwise doesn't deviate from his usual methods and mannerisms. He is very descrite when quelling his genetic urges, usually using his magic to mind-control someone -- the target has to be very weak-minded, as Irukanji hasn't perfected this ability yet -- and suck out some of their blood; not enough to kill them, and usually in a place that is covered up by clothing so no one will see the mark. He has a less-suspicious way to do this, though; if someone gets wise to his true nature, he uses Essence magic to literally rip out their soul and eat it -- his favorite way to kill, as it also restores his magical power -- and then hide their body so he has a bountiful supply of blood later on. He is always on the move, not having any real home other than the abandoned house of his adopted parents; he usually rents a room in a hotel or something when he needs a place to stay. If someone really pisses him off, he might use Psychorian magic to induce a nightmare in their sleep; his favorite hobby.

Fighting Style: Irukanji rarely does any real battle, usually just killing anyone who causes him a fair amount of trouble with a slash of a Body-Altered claw to the neck or heart, whichever is easier to hit at the time; when on the job, he does this with a throwing knife or a pistol.

An actual battle is different; he will immediately cast some form of magical barrier to prevent people from exploiting his genetic weakness of low endurance, then use a volley of low-power spells. Should that fail, he will use a very high-power spell to finish the job. Also, despite his low endurance, his athletic ability is very good; he can sprint, evade and jump with a ease, though he prefers to use magic power to let him hover and fly (he is still trying to master this ability, however, as it seems to falter uncontrollably and unpredictably).

Edited by Shadow_Link, 25 July 2008 - 01:14 PM.


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Posted 26 July 2008 - 12:12 AM

Alright. You need some major changes, world wise. If you have any questions or need help on any of this, just let me know.

Let's start with the name. Unless you are absolutely dead-set on having it be Irukanji Ibuki, please change it to something less Japanese. Pick a European language or come up with something by yourself.

Secondly, Purple Vampirs are nearly identical to normal humans. This means that you need a damn good reason for making him seven feet tall, his eyes should not be silver, and his hair should not be purple (unless dyed)

There is no technology for silencers, and guns are very, very rare and inaccurate. More on the Body alteration later.

Let's talk about the bio. Firstly, nine years isn't nearly long enough to gain the abilities you give him. Essence magic requires hand signs to perform by all but the most advanced users, a child of nine years, even a purple Vampir, could not achieve a spark without training in what hand signs to perform. Also, if you want him rich, you need to come up with a better reason. Vigilantes/Mercenaries don't normally make all that much, not enough to have what you describe him as having made in 9 years.

Body Alteration: Apparently you don't understand the concept behind it. It doesn't allow you to alter your body persay, it simply allows you to have complete control over, releasing inbuilt limits on muscle ability, stopping and starting one's heart, blocking pain, etc. So it would be impossible to give onesself claws with this. Also kill the soul eating thing. There is no Magical power either, per-say, the amount one can handle depends on how strong one's mind is. Overuse begins to hurt ones body. Also, please learn to spell, it's Psichoran, not psychorian.

That's all for the moment, but if I think of something else I'll let you know.

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Posted 26 July 2008 - 09:15 AM

Gah, too many mistakes to correct, and the RP is starting. Can I just make a Dragon Lords-ized Shadow (with no magic) really quick?

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Posted 26 July 2008 - 01:06 PM

I would prefer that you not. It really probably won't take as much tweaking as it seems like, and the RPG will probably move rather slowly to begin with. If you really really want to I suppose I can't really stop you, but the dude up there will make an interesting character eventually. Plus you're pretty close to good on actual submission wise. If you want me to walk you through it you can add me on IM.




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