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[Stalfos]

EDIT: Okay, let's try this:

...AND AGAIN: *Cough*
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Name: Itō Takashi.

Original: Yes.

Origin: ...

Age: 22.

Gender: Male.

Height:Five feet, seven inches.

Weight: 187 pounds.

Hair Color: Brown.

Eye Color: Green.

Apparel: Takashi often wears a simple white Gi and orange headband. However, on special occasions, he will wear his navy-blue Kimono.

Bio: Born in Shimamoto, Osaka, Takashi was sent off to the Shintō Musō-ryū Koryū at the age of ten to learn the art of Bōjudo. Training for eleven difficult years in the best Bōjudo Koryū in Japan*, he is a formidable fighter -- on the rare occasion, given his charming wit and kind personality, that he winds up in a fight in the first place.
After he finished his training, he traveled south and settled down in the village of Iyeha, located in the Shimajiri District of the Okinawa Prefecture, where he has owns a small Koryū.

Strengths: With his ornately painted Rokushakubō and slim physique, Takashi is a nimble fighter.
His sense of humour, friendly personality, and quick wit allow him to fit in easily among groups of other people. He also has an --almost unnatural -- ability to remain calm under pressure.

Weaknesses: Of course, his slim physique can be quite a hindrance against larger foes. His years living in the Shintō Musō-ryū Koryū also left him without a connection to the outside world, and so he is not very knowledgeable about the world around him. And lastly, he knows only how to fight with a Bō. Not to say that he couldn't swing a sword blindly, in a pinch, but that would be the extent of it.

Weapon: Bamboo Rokushakubo; painted sky blue and crimson, with Katakana spelling out in silver: Itō

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*Or the only one I could find. >.<

Edited by Armed_Stalfos, 19 August 2007 - 10:11 PM.

[Delphi]

The bio is a little too skimpy for me to let by, sorry. A few short sentences doesn't tell me how he came to be a fighter or anything like that. Did he just pick up a stick and decided he wanted to thwack people? Or was there a purpose behind it?

The strengths and weaknesses need a little hammering out but you're almost there. Add a little more to the weakness. Annoying sense of humor is a little weak and it's almost a given that a smaller framed person would falter against burlier enemies.

It's a good start, it just needs a little more meat.

[Stalfos]

There we go. May not be much of an improvement, but at least there's a bit of backstory. >.>

[Delphi]

Just one more quick question: Is this character for the tournament or the RP proper?

[Stalfos]

Yes.

...I feel I should add more to this post. o.o

[Nevermind]

Yeah probably just two or three more sentences in his Bio. Just let us know a tad more about his background. At this stage I know he was sent to train at ten. He trained for eleven years. He is kind and witty. Sometimes he gets into fights. Seeing as it's for the Tourney, it doesn't need as much, so just two sentences should do. Just let us in on his background a little.

[Stalfos]

Does it have to make direct mention of the Tourney?

[Nevermind]

Nope. That'll do. Approved.