I thought of this from thin air...and I thought it sounded good. It's only two lines.
I originally wrote this for Inukensha, but I thought that it'd be cool to share it. Tell me what you think.
I love you today.
I love you tomarrow.
I'll love you forever,
In sickness and sorrow.
For better or worse.
For richer or poorer.
Losing me,
Will never be a horror.
I wrote a poem.
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Hylian
, Dec 02 2006 10:47 PM
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Posted 02 December 2006 - 10:47 PM
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Posted 02 December 2006 - 11:11 PM
AAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!! very cute hylian 
, i like it [img]http://forums.legendsalliance.com/public/ALOT.png[/img].
, i like it [img]http://forums.legendsalliance.com/public/ALOT.png[/img].
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Posted 02 December 2006 - 11:14 PM
Thank you. I like you very much, too. 
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Posted 17 January 2007 - 10:50 PM
It was good/cute but lol thinking of marriage are we?
I just didn't like the "Loosing me will never be a horror"
... I just think you could have picked something more light and cutesy to go along with the rest
I just didn't like the "Loosing me will never be a horror"
... I just think you could have picked something more light and cutesy to go along with the rest
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Posted 17 January 2007 - 10:57 PM
Well, excuuuuse me! It was spur of the moment!
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Posted 18 January 2007 - 05:01 AM
I think it was great ^^
But as said, I think the last line could've fit with the rest. It kinda made me uneasy to read it.
Otherwise, its very nice ^^
But as said, I think the last line could've fit with the rest. It kinda made me uneasy to read it.
Otherwise, its very nice ^^
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Posted 18 January 2007 - 08:40 AM
That's not bad, Hylian. I guess your best inspirations/motivations for poems are love.
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Posted 18 January 2007 - 09:10 AM
Well, excuuuuse me! It was spur of the moment!
lol don't be offended, I really liked it! It was cute n_n and good for spur of the moment... its just you know, revision doesn't hurt =p
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Posted 27 January 2007 - 12:33 PM
I thought I was great too and the last line to me was great for this poem.
Hylian you are great with poems.
Hylian you are great with poems.
