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[Ken the Wandering Soul]

(Takes a deep breath) Okay, here it goes...



The Dentavi Chronicles: Far Reach
PART I

Era: Similier to Midievil Europe / Warring states Japan.
Location: The continent of Dentavi
Genre: Fantasy, Adventure/Action
Source: Original

PART II

On a plane of existant different from our own, or perhaps it’s merely an alternate form of our universe, there exists the continent of Dentavi. There are two separate culture areas of Dentavi: Eporue and Nohin.

Eporue is on the western side of the continent, with Nohin in the east.

Eporue is divided into countries, each under the rule of a Grand Lord. Each Grand Lord has knights under his command. The weapon of choice is usually the broadsword. Men usually tunics with a matching pair of pants, women have tendancy to wear dresses or skirts. Not many people can afford swords or axes, so usually people will use something like a quarterstaff, knive or sickle. Usually, some weapons might be concealed If someone carries a sword out into public it is assumed that they should not be bothered.

Nohin’s equivalent of countries are states. Each state is under rule of a Shogen, and each Shogen has samurai. The weapon of choice is usually a katana. Most people wear kimonos, and some others wear fighting gi. Weapons are more common in Nohin, usuakky since monsters are more common there. Usually, when a walking the streets of a Nohin town, anyone who can wield a weapon will usually have it open to the eye of the public.

In between the two areas, is ‘neutral’ territory. No one is quite sure where the border ends or begins, but everyone knows it exist. The neutral territory is made up of a blend of the two culture groups. Monsters are especially common here, since there is less civilization.

Of all the monsters in Dentavi, Demons are feared the most. A monster is classified as something evil, while a demon is considered not just evil, but unholy. The technical definition of a demon is "Anything with an unholy soul".





It is now the 145th year of the Wanderer’s Era. Over the past few months, a group of people from the neutral territory have been attacking and pillaging both Nohin and Eporue towns and villages.

This group dosen’t have a revealed name, and no one knows why exactly it has been doing what it’s been doing. But one thing is for certain; they are a threat to both Nohin and Eporue, and must be stopped. Representatives from both areas decided to meet in neutral territory, far from the confirmed location where the rogue group was centered.

The representatives offered 100,000,000 pounds of gold to whoever could eliminate the mysterious group. Many people have tried to infiltrate the area where the group is, but have neve been heard from.

This is where the story starts…

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PART III

Characters can use weapons, magic, etc. If you wish to use a demon character, please come up with an excuse that he/she would work for the group. Elves, dwarves, etc, will be acceptable races.

And of course, no godding. If you want someone’s character to do something, please ask permission in either PM or at the end of your post.

[DarkJuno]

Decent start, but the background needs some more work, as does the motivation for characters involved.

The background is a nice basis, but that's it. It lacks detail that makes these worlds come to life, because right now, they're just two places that rip-off the Middle Ages and Shogunate Japan. Why are the two cultures so vastly different - is it just because it's a huge continent, or is it because of the environment and whatnot? The bit about monsters was one good inkling of this, so expand upon that and add more for both sides, not to mention the neutral territory.

As for motivation, it looks like a flat offer. Detail this offer made by the so called meeting, and the decision making involved, not to mention to expand upon the events which drove them to even agree to the meeting.

Start working.

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

The Dentavi Chronicles: Far Reach

PART I

Era: Similier to Midievil Europe / Warring states Japan.
Location: The continent of Dentavi
Genre: Fantasy, Adventure/Action
Source: Original

PART II

On a plane of existant different from our own, or perhaps it’s merely an alternate form of our universe, there exists the continent of Dentavi. There are two separate culture areas of Dentavi: Eporue and Nohin.

Eporue is on the western side of the continent, with Nohin in the east.

Eporue is divided into countries, each under the rule of a Grand Lord. Each Grand Lord has knights under his command. The weapon of choice is usually the broadsword. Men usually tunics with a matching pair of pants, women have tendancy to wear dresses or skirts. Not many people can afford swords or axes, so usually people will use something like a quarterstaff, knive or sickle. Usually, some weapons might be concealed If someone carries a sword out into public it is assumed that they should not be bothered.

Nohin’s equivalent of countries are states. Each state is under rule of a Shogen, and each Shogen has samurai. The weapon of choice is usually a katana. Most people wear kimonos, and some others wear fighting gi. Weapons are more common in Nohin, usuakky since monsters are more common there. Usually, when a walking the streets of a Nohin town, anyone who can wield a weapon will usually have it open to the eye of the public.

In between the two areas, is ‘neutral’ territory. No one is quite sure where the border ends or begins, but everyone knows it exist. The neutral territory is made up of a blend of the two culture groups. Monsters are especially common here, since there is less civilization.

Of all the monsters in Dentavi, Demons are feared the most. A monster is classified as something evil, while a demon is considered not just evil, but unholy. The technical definition of a demon is "Anything with an unholy soul".

There is an old tale that says that once, the Eporue and Nohin regions were the same. However one day, a ruler on the eastern side of the continent, Lord Corland, declared that everyone should prepare themselves for a great and terrible war. This ruler said he had a vision, and in this visio, he saw the entire continent in ruins, monsters wandering desert-like plains. The other eastern lords noticed that more monsters had begun to appear and joined forces with Corland. The lords in the west laughed, saying it was just a coincidence that monsters were appearing, and that Corland was having nightmares.

The eastern lords now denied of their pride, declared that they were ceceding themselves from the other half of the continent, and would no longer have anything to with the western lords.

No one knows exactly how long, perhaps a 1,000 years or even 5,000 years, the people of the east held that statement to heart. Eventully, the east changed almost completely to what it became. After awhile, either side forgot the other existed, and no one knew what was beyond the forbidden boarder.

It wasen’t until 147 years ago when out of some some cosmic coincidence, a young boy from Eporue and a young girl from Nohinfound their way into the overgrown area soon to be known a nuetral territory. These two found each other, and it was love at first sight.

This was troubling for both regions, but eventully they accepted the love of the two. And thus, a new age was ushered in: the Wanderer’s Era. It was title given because in this new age, someone could wander over the entire continent, and not be stopped by the boarder known as nuetral territory. The two sides maintained their culture, but began trading and helping one another. It was truely an age of prosperity.

It is now the 145th year of the Wanderer’s Era. Over the past few months, a group of people from the neutral territory have been attacking and pillaging both Nohin and Eporue towns and villages.

This group dosen’t have a revealed name, and no one knows why exactly it has been doing what it’s been doing. But one thing is for certain; they are a threat to both Nohin and Eporue, and must be stopped. Representatives from both areas decided to meet in neutral territory, far from the confirmed location where the rogue group was centered. This decision to work together to fight this powerful force was decided when two Shogens and two Grand Lords had been killed.

After gathering large amounts of resources from both reagions and much discussion the representatives came up with an idea. The representatives offered 100,000,000 pounds of gold to whoever could eliminate the mysterious group. Many people have tried to infiltrate the area where the group is, but have neve been heard from.

Because of all the deaths, people began to realize that even that much gold wasen’t worth the extreme possibility of being killed. The place where the representatives had gathered was now in close proximity to other villages that had been demolished. Many of the Shogens and Grand Lords had left. The rest that stayed behind, desperate, tacked on more rewards; land, servents, anything to have more people. Samurai and knights now daily ask for anyone who can help to meet with the Shogens and Grand Lords in the town square.

This is where the story starts…

PART III
Characters can use weapons, magic, etc. If you wish to use a demon character, please come up with an excuse that he/she would work for the group. Elves, dwarves, etc, will be acceptable races.

And of course, no godding. If you want someone’s character to do something, please ask permission in either PM or at the end of your post.

[DarkJuno]

Better, but still, it's just background. Why should anyone care about it for the current time? Apply this to the people who will answer this call and whatnot. Another problem is that there's no focal point in the initial RPG - big, wide open RPG's where anyone can join are good, but there has to be a definitive beginning, whether people choose to start nearby or on their own.

Keep working.

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

*Deep breath* Okay... I added in a few things. But seriously, I can't think up any more motivational reasons for a character to join.

The Dentavi Chronicles: Far Reach

PART I

Era: Similier to Midievil Europe / Warring states Japan.
Location: The continent of Dentavi
Genre: Fantasy, Adventure/Action
Source: Original

PART II

On a plane of existant different from our own, or perhaps it’s merely an alternate form of our universe, there exists the continent of Dentavi. There are two separate culture areas of Dentavi: Eporue and Nohin.

Eporue is on the western side of the continent, with Nohin in the east.

Eporue is divided into countries, each under the rule of a Grand Lord. Each Grand Lord has knights under his command. The weapon of choice is usually the broadsword. Men usually tunics with a matching pair of pants, women have tendancy to wear dresses or skirts. Not many people can afford swords or axes, so usually people will use something like a quarterstaff, knive or sickle. Usually, some weapons might be concealed If someone carries a sword out into public it is assumed that they should not be bothered.

Nohin’s equivalent of countries are states. Each state is under rule of a Shogen, and each Shogen has samurai. The weapon of choice is usually a katana. Most people wear kimonos, and some others wear fighting gi. Weapons are more common in Nohin, usuakky since monsters are more common there. Usually, when a walking the streets of a Nohin town, anyone who can wield a weapon will usually have it open to the eye of the public.

In between the two areas, is ‘neutral’ territory. No one is quite sure where the border ends or begins, but everyone knows it exist. The neutral territory is made up of a blend of the two culture groups. Monsters are especially common here, since there is less civilization.

Of all the monsters in Dentavi, Demons are feared the most. A monster is classified as something evil, while a demon is considered not just evil, but unholy. The technical definition of a demon is “Anything with an unholy soul”.

There is an old tale that says that once, the Eporue and Nohin regions were the same. However one day, a ruler on the eastern side of the continent, Lord Corland, declared that everyone should prepare themselves for a great and terrible war. This ruler said he had a vision, and in this visio, he saw the entire continent in ruins, monsters wandering desert-like plains. The other eastern lords noticed that more monsters had begun to appear and joined forces with Corland. The lords in the west laughed, saying it was just a coincidence that monsters were appearing, and that Corland was having nightmares.

The eastern lords now denied of their pride, declared that they were ceceding themselves from the other half of the continent, and would no longer have anything to with the western lords.

No one knows exactly how long, perhaps a 1,000 years or even 5,000 years, the people of the east held that statement to heart. Eventully, the east changed almost completely to what it became. After awhile, either side forgot the other existed, and no one knew what was beyond the forbidden boarder.

It wasen’t until 147 years ago when out of some some cosmic coincidence, a young boy from Eporue and a young girl from Nohinfound their way into the overgrown area soon to be known a nuetral territory. These two found each other, and it was love at first sight.

This was troubling for both regions, but eventully they accepted the love of the two. And thus, a new age was ushered in: the Wanderer’s Era. It was title given because in this new age, someone could wander over the entire continent, and not be stopped by the boarder known as nuetral territory. The two sides maintained their culture, but began trading and helping one another. It was truely an age of prosperity.

It is now the 145th year of the Wanderer’s Era. Over the past few months, a group of people from the neutral territory have been attacking and pillaging both Nohin and Eporue towns and villages.

This group dosen’t have a revealed name, and no one knows why exactly it has been doing what it’s been doing. But one thing is for certain; they are a threat to both Nohin and Eporue, and must be stopped. Representatives from both areas decided to meet in neutral territory, far from the confirmed location where the rogue group was centered. This decision to work together to fight this powerful force was decided when two Shogens and two Grand Lords had been killed.

After gathering large amounts of resources from both reasons and much discussion the representatives came up with an idea. The representatives offered 100,000,000 pounds of gold to whoever could eliminate the mysterious group. Many people have tried to infiltrate the area where the group is, but have neve been heard from. The few survivers form the attacks have said they have seen a man on horseback with a holy sword leading the attacks. The representatives also want to who he is, deciding that he might be the leader of this group, or at least someone’s right-hand man.

Because of all the deaths, people began to realize that even that much gold wasen’t worth the extreme possibility of being killed. The place where the representatives had gathered was now in close proximity to other villages that had been demolished. Many of the Shogens and Grand Lords had left. The rest that stayed behind, desperate, tacked on more rewards; land, servents, anything to have more people. Samurai and knights now daily ask for anyone who can help to meet with the Shogens and Grand Lords in the town square.

There are also those who want to fight because they have lost reletives or friends to the unknown group. Some also want to fight to prove something to themselves. SOme just wish to fight because it's something convient to do.

This is where the story starts…

PART III

The story is going to start in the town where the Shogens and Grand Lords are gathered. To help draw the character's together, the unknown group is going to attack, forcing the characters into cooperation.

Characters can use weapons, magic, etc. If you wish to use a demon character, please come up with an excuse that he/she would work for the group. Elves, dwarves, etc, will be acceptable races.

And of course, no godding. If you want someone’s character to do something, please ask permission in either PM or at the end of your post.

[DarkJuno]

I hate to do this to you, but that's still not a lot of detail. You've certainly taken the right steps by including the little story, but flesh that out more - for example, you present the two people meeting and falling in love, then the two sides being irritated then shrugging and making up in a sentence or two. That needs to be expanded upon. For such a historic event, it would be assumed that there would be far more details on that one event - the times before that are decent, but certainly, more detail there would help immensely.

Keep it up!

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

*Deep Breath* (Please, for the love of god, let this be the last time.)

The Dentavi Chronicles: Far Reach
PART I

Era: Similier to Midievil Europe / Warring states Japan.
Location: The continent of Dentavi
Genre: Fantasy, Adventure/Action
Source: Original

PART II

On a plane of existant different from our own, or perhaps it’s merely an alternate form of our universe, there exists the continent of Dentavi. There are two separate culture areas of Dentavi: Eporue and Nohin.

Eporue is on the western side of the continent, with Nohin in the east.

Eporue is divided into countries, each under the rule of a Grand Lord. Each Grand Lord has knights under his command. The weapon of choice is usually the broadsword. Men usually tunics with a matching pair of pants, women have tendancy to wear dresses or skirts. Not many people can afford swords or axes, so usually people will use something like a quarterstaff, knive or sickle. Usually, some weapons might be concealed If someone carries a sword out into public it is assumed that they should not be bothered.

Nohin’s equivalent of countries are states. Each state is under rule of a Shogen, and each Shogen has samurai. The weapon of choice is usually a katana. Most people wear kimonos, and some others wear fighting gi. Weapons are more common in Nohin, usuakky since monsters are more common there. Usually, when a walking the streets of a Nohin town, anyone who can wield a weapon will usually have it open to the eye of the public.

In between the two areas, is ‘neutral’ territory. No one is quite sure where the border ends or begins, but everyone knows it exist. The neutral territory is made up of a blend of the two culture groups. Monsters are especially common here, since there is less civilization.

Of all the monsters in Dentavi, Demons are feared the most. A monster is classified as something evil, while a demon is considered not just evil, but unholy. The technical definition of a demon is "Anything with an unholy soul".

There is an old tale that says that once, the Eporue and Nohin regions were the same. However one day, a ruler on the eastern side of the continent, Lord Corland, declared that everyone should prepare themselves for a great and terrible war. This ruler said he had a vision, and in this visio, he saw the entire continent in ruins, monsters wandering desert-like plains. The other eastern lords noticed that more monsters had begun to appear and joined forces with Corland. The lords in the west laughed, saying it was just a coincidence that monsters were appearing, and that Corland was having nightmares.

The eastern lords now denied of their pride, declared that they were ceceding themselves from the other half of the continent, and would no longer have anything to with the western lords.

No one knows exactly how long, perhaps a 1,000 years or even 5,000 years, the people of the east held that statement to heart. Eventully, the east changed almost completely to what it became. After awhile, either side forgot the other existed, and no one knew what was beyond the forbidden boarder.

It wasen’t until 147 years ago when out of some some cosmic coincidence, a young boy from Eporue and a young girl from Nohin found their way into the overgrown area soon to be known a nuetral territory. These two found each other, and it was love at first sight.

This was troubling for both regions, but eventully they accepted the love of the two. However, before the peace was made between the two regions, many things happened. The common people were uneasy knowing that another place existed on the other side of the forbidden border. Leaders who had access to the old tales of Dentavi began to realize why the regions split. The young boy, Denwood was the son of a very important grand lord. Coincidentaly, the girl, Sakura was the daughter of a very important shogen. When the two realized that their love could start a war between the two regions, they knew had to do stop something to prevent the bloodshed. Selflessly, the two joined hands and said this as one:

"If this world cannot except our love, then perhaps the next one will!"

The leaders of both regions knew what this meant: the love-struck boy and girl would rather take their lives than have the fighting go betweent he two regions, the two would be torn appart. An uneasy truce was formed between Nohin and Eporue. Eventuly, this tight truce became looser, and looser. And thus, a new age was ushered in: the Wanderer’s Era. It was title given because in this new age, someone could wander over the entire continent, and not be stopped by the boarder known as nuetral territory. The two sides maintained their culture, but began trading and helping one another. It was truely an age of prosperity.

It is now the 145th year of the Wanderer’s Era. Over the past few months, a group of people from the neutral territory have been attacking and pillaging both Nohin and Eporue towns and villages.

This group dosen’t have a revealed name, and no one knows why exactly it has been doing what it’s been doing. But one thing is for certain; they are a threat to both Nohin and Eporue, and must be stopped. Representatives from both areas decided to meet in neutral territory, far from the confirmed location where the rogue group was centered. This decision to work together to fight this powerful force was decided when two Shogens and two Grand Lords had been killed.

After gathering large amounts of resources from both reasons and much discussion the representatives came up with an idea. The representatives offered 100,000,000 pounds of gold to whoever could eliminate the mysterious group. Many people have tried to infiltrate the area where the group is, but have neve been heard from. The few survivers form the attacks have said they have seen a man on horseback with a holy sword leading the attacks. The representatives also want to who he is, deciding that he might be the leader of this group, or at least someone’s right-hand man.

Because of all the deaths, people began to realize that even that much gold wasen’t worth the extreme possibility of being killed. The place where the representatives had gathered was now in close proximity to other villages that had been demolished. Many of the Shogens and Grand Lords had left. The rest that stayed behind, desperate, tacked on more rewards; land, servents, anything to have more people. Samurai and knights now daily ask for anyone who can help to meet with the Shogens and Grand Lords in the town square.

There are also those who want to fight because they have lost reletives or friends to the rogue group. Some also want to fight to prove something to themselves. Some just wish to fight because it’s something convenient to do.

This is where the story starts…


PART III

Characters can use weapons, magic, etc. If you wish to use a demon character, please come up with an excuse that he/she would work for the group. Elves, dwarves, etc, will be acceptable races.

And of course, no godding. If you want someone’s character to do something, please ask permission in either PM or at the end of your post.

[DarkJuno]

Much better, especially compared to your initial post. I have some reservations, but very well. I declare this RPG open for discussion.

Happy recruiting!

[Phoenix Reborn]

ken, i want my demi-god of elemental fire Dante in this piece. His title is more imposing than his actual powers, since the actual plane/dimension he was god on collapsed into itself from corruption. thanx

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

Thanks PR. ^^

[Phoenix Reborn]

thanx, ken, i look forward to it!

[Merahuta]

Okay, Hey Ken do you mind if I join. I'll post up my character as soon as possible.

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

Go ahead, both of you.

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

^_^ Certainly. Thanks.

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

Anyone else interested? C'mon, don't be shy.

[Phoenix Reborn]

we're ready to start ken, lets do it!!!!!!!

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

I wish we could, but we have to wait for DJ's "blessing".

[Phoenix Reborn]

wait, ken, i was thinking, could i get one of my LoK characters in here also? Kain or Raziel perhaps? (one is ancient vampire, the other is a demon)

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

Use whoever you want.

[Goose]

May I also Join?

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

Certainly. Go ahead ^_^.

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

... Well, it looks like everyone has joined who wants to. Unless someone wants to join mid-rping.

[DarkJuno]

I should've already closed this for lack of interest, but if those who did speak up still wish to do so, go ahead.

I hearby declare this approved. Good luck and have fun.

[Ken the Wandering Soul]

... Well, I don't feel terribly comfortable with new forum-goers RPing, but if you get an appropriate aprooved character, you may.

And perhaps I should say a few more things. First, if anyone else wants to join mid-RP, please Private Message me instead of posting here.

Second, please use characters appropriate with the RP storie's background. Some of the characters who are in Dentavi Chronicles (or are going to be in it) were made intentionally for use in it. That isen't really neccasary, but try to make a character who can at least fit into a generic fantasy setting.